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1. The golden pheasant tippets should line up perfectly. See
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2. The peacock herl should be square at both ends and equally dense. The rear wrap looks like it thins out as it moves forward.

3. I have not tied this particular fly but to "me" the peacock herl looks too long, i.e. not proportional to the rest of the fly.

4. For presentation, I would flatten the tying thread, smooth out the head and coat it with enough head cement, clear and black to make it smooth as glass.

All in all as a teacher of mine likes to say...it will catch fish.