You are welcome WarrenP. So to capture all the critiques given so far: Keep the narrow red gill band, bigger eyes, and then return to the sparse tie of the original image and then add a little flash to taste. The hurl on the back is always a good idea on bait batterns IMO. Doesn't take much to get the contrast. You could try the pattern with no flash, then a tye with one strand and another with hurl and a few strands. By the time you are done you'll have a pattern worth repeating! Good luck and have fun..
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Saw the report. Nice going: I feel the reason that the fly turned upside down is because you are using a hook with a downturned eye. Think about it. Streamers are best tied with upturned hook eyes. Orvis makes streamer hooks with the hook eye vertical. I like these and use them too. My favorite streamer hooks are from Galic Supreme which have a slightly upturned eye. Owner makes some good hooks with upturned eyes. Try a new hook style before re-inventing the pattern that seems to be working for you. Just my 3 cents again..
Cool pics!..