Tag has open turns. Tail is right length. There are some trapped GP barbs that are sticking out at a different angle than the tail. That is because you tied the tail in over untrimmed barbs. Butt is pretty poor, uneven turns and not close turns, leaves an uneven butt like this. Turns should be almost on top of the prior turn of the barbs. Front body segment should have ended 1/2 of the way into the head. In other words, the head is only twice the size as it should be.

Actually, I suggest you read the salmon fly tying lessons here at FAOL. It will take you through the steps with pictures and better descriptions than can be given here.